Sasuke's retribution -oneshot

[naureen-rally.livejournal.com]

Standard Disclaimers apply
This was supposed to be a Sasu-Saku, but I think I like the way it ended up.

Title: Sasuke's Retribution
Fandom: Naruto
Pairing: Naru-Saku, one-sided SasuSaku, hintings of Sasu-Hina
Setting: Three years after Sasuke returns from Akatsuki
Warnings: Current MANGA spoilers
  

Everyone had imagined that the last Uchiha would be shunned when he came back to the village.

Not my best work to date; written in ten minutes because I was bored.

Comments

[senbonzakura77.livejournal.com]

Hmm.. this looks like a really intriguing premise for a story. I was really quite shocked when I saw the Sasu/Hina pairing - not many choose to write that one! :)

Secondly, you wrote the dynamics of Team Kakashi post-Sasuke's return quite well - that sounds about like how they'd react given that situation. [Though, it's slightly OC for Naruto, but if Sakura were his girlfriend, then I'd say he'd be a little annoyed to see his former rival for her attention back.] I also figured that SAKURA would be the one pining slightly for Sasuke, so the turnaround was quite a nice surprise. XD

The insight into Sasuke's head + his allegiance to Team Hawk.. that's a really intriguing possibility that I've wondered about these past few manga chapters.

And that ending.. haha. XD I really want to hear Hinata's reaction to that little introduction.. And you characterized her quite well - I imagine after pining for Naruto all those years, I daresay she'd be more than a little heartbroken at him picking Sakura.

All in all, nice job! :)

[naureen-rally.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much. I imagined that after chapter 414 that Sasuke would be hit with a more than subtle realization that he's never been alone just too blind to see everyone around him.

I'm not too sure if I want to write more for this. It was just something that I typed without thinking too much. (Honestly homework was getting boring so I needed an escape)
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Check out my story Tomatoes if your interested in Sasu-Hina...its funny.

[meganehina.livejournal.com]

This was really good.
I love the way you've described Sasuke's feelings without going OOC. I love that for the first Sasuke is craving Sakura and not the contrary, it gave her dignity and made him understand his mistakes.
And while I'm not much into SasuHina, I wish I could read more SasuSaku or SasuSakuNaru from you ;D

[naureen-rally.livejournal.com]

Thanks. This was initially supposed to be a Sasu-Saku piece since I think thats like the only fandom I haven't written for, but it didn't end up like that.

Once again Thanks